"Love is not a word, but a feeling to live,
You never get anything, but always do give.
It is a just a state of mind,
which makes two hearts bind.
Like a land of the lost without a map,
To sleep there would always be a lap.
A very long and a perilous journey,
Pain and pleasure you experience at the same time,
Others think as if you hav done some crime.
Waiting just for a single glance,
Hearts for which start to dance.
When you are in it,
A smile will always be on your face.
But to remind everyone,
It is like a thin cotton lace.
When the distance increases in between,
It is to watch a deadly looking scene.
Feels as if tonnes of stones on the little heart,
And it dies part by part.
Not even the funniest jokes can then tickle your funny bone,
Never again will the face be shone.
Hence Love is like a feather,
Pain and Pleasure together...”
This one I liked. I would make just one suggestion: Try to write a poem that doesn't rhyme at the end of each line. See if you can space the rhyming word, so it picks up upon it in two lines down, or even use half-rhymes. You'll be quite surprised at the effect this has on the attentiveness the reader places upon the poem. This is also a better way to bring poetry into a spoken/oral context. Enjoy writing. Keep at it. :)
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